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[sabotagge]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

Looks like a good starting point.As a big fan of NTR this definetly strikes my interest.The map could be a bit less confusing/easier to navigate.

The blond girl from your signature isn't in the game yet right?
I really like her character design and I would like to know more about her.

 

[hrpgheaven]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

The blode character is one of the two MC's that will lead the second game, they will have cameos in all our games. She's also more my type, but I wanted Ayame to be a generic, ultimate girl next door character that appealed to most people, all her traits and her design is meant to fit it.

 

[Dole]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

You wrote for months that you publish the Demo and then only Patreon people get them and then so many bugs?

Maybe you should work more on the Game and don´t vanish your time to think about illegal copies !!!

The first bug known from a lot of other Games.

You have two many words in you line sentence.

For example:
Robert: order to retu
to Heaven City.

The sentence have not all the max words in the line sentences it looks like all the Games they are not tested.

For me you are a liar and the Game Demo fished for not long time or you don´t fixing game bugs.

A liar is a liar and I wouldn´t trust you to give money when you lie about the Game you would do it aso in the future !!!

 

[Deleted member 18619]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

How does one get the Melvin scene? The only scene I had was the one with Robert.

 

[hrpgheaven]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

How does one get the Melvin scene? The only scene I had was the one with Robert.

On the 10th day don't go to the Town Hall, instead go back to Melvin's.

You wrote for months that you publish the Demo and then only Patreon people get them and then so many bugs?

Maybe you should work more on the Game and don´t vanish your time to think about illegal copies !!!

The first bug known from a lot of other Games.

You have two many words in you line sentence.

For example:
Robert: order to retu
to Heaven City.

The sentence have not all the max words in the line sentences it looks like all the Games they are not tested.

For me you are a liar and the Game Demo fished for not long time or you don´t fixing game bugs.

A liar is a liar and I wouldn´t trust you to give money when you lie about the Game you would do it aso in the future !!!

Thanks for the feedback.

That HUUUUUUUUUUGE bug happened when we made some last minute grammar changes in the sentence and didn't check if it was gonna fit or not, in our mind it was something very minor, I'm very sorry that one sentence had two letters off-screen and that makes the game unplayable, there's many other projects around like Aylia's story, Adventures of Tara, Officer Chloe, etc. around, you should check those out, the authors are amazing.

 

[Dole]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

On the 10th day don't go to the Town Hall, instead go back to Melvin's.



Thanks for the feedback.

That HUUUUUUUUUUGE bug happened when we made some last minute grammar changes in the sentence and didn't check if it was gonna fit or not, in our mind it was something very minor, I'm very sorry that one sentence had two letters off-screen and that makes the game unplayable, there's many other projects around like Aylia's story, Adventures of Tara, Officer Chloe, etc. around, you should check those out, the authors are amazing.

The Game looks like a Ghost Town.

In the Bus depot you can walk about the automat.

Sorry for the stupid you told us for months the Game have to many bugs and you are three peoples and the others are most only one so this Demo must be checked with higher standards and it loose.

When the Game checked from your patreons for months what have you done in this time ???

The first time I go west to come to my work place. And at my first work day I can´t go to west this make no sence.

Ayame and Robert are missing on the second date with the neighbours on the screen on the table outdoors.

When you get a date from the neighbours Ayame wear nothing special and walk all time with the same clothes.

The Game is linear you don´t know why you have so a big map when you do nothing in the time aso in the house.

You worked 8 years as a waitress and you can´t handle harasement? How realistic.

At the moment the story is not so good and you don´t know exact what can be happen in the future.

I say it a second time the Game looks not if it was released to patreons for months !!!

 

[Hentaisearch]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

Been waiting for this for a while now. Although the demo is a little short, I can tell the full game is going to be worth the wait. Here are some thoughts.

Cool Stuff

• Music - Unique.
• Attention to detail - Sprites to actual images were spot on.
• Not a walking simulator - Teleporting home after you finish your job is a godsend. No padding emphasizes just how story driven the game is. Keep this up.
• Art - It's good.

Not Cool Stuff

• When you choose to have sex with Robert and choose to cum inside, Ayame has this incredibly stiff look to her because she has her eyes open. It looks awkward and weird. Kind of like in that way if you were to kiss someone on the lips, but you keep your eyes open the whole time. Cumming outside is fine though. That's how it should look like.
• You can move during some cut-scenes. I only know of two; when you first meet Jack and when you meet with Robert to go to the neighbor's house for the first time. In the latter, I was actually fast enough to move to the next screen. Going back to Robert resets the cut-scene. It looks like it only happens during cut-scenes with pauses.
• When choosing decisions, it's weird to be given color coated choices denoting "pure" or "corrupt." It gives the player the information of the outcome, i.e. stat changes, before they even select a choice. I guess it's fine if it's for people who are just in the game for hentai, but in a story driven game, having that sense of mystery of "did I choose the right choice?" and really thinking about what choice the player wants to make really adds to it. Although the color coating is probably a really good idea for New Game+. I'd actually like to hear more about this design choice.
• Some typos - Pretty sure I saw "apron" spelled as "appron" and "house" being cut off as "hou."
• The three "thugs" that come to the bar aren't thugs at all. Only the one on the top left is. The others are "Uhh... Yes, I'm ready to order please."
• When you talk to the shithead who's in cahoots with Melvin BEFORE you change into your apron, the image displayed of Ayame is of Ayame AFTER she changes into her apron.
• Dialogue seems really... simple? Best way I can describe it. Also during sex scenes, don't be afraid to add in details.
• During the last few days of work, I didn't get a message saying I got paid. I think I got paid though. Specifically I think it was the last two days.

Super Minor Nit Picky Stuff

• The red when describing the moral system isn't red. It's like an orange.
• Calling them "Quest" is out of place for a game set in modern time.

 

[hrpgheaven]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

Been waiting for this for a while now. Although the demo is a little short, I can tell the full game is going to be worth the wait. Here are some thoughts.

Cool Stuff

• Music - Unique.
• Attention to detail - Sprites to actual images were spot on.
• Not a walking simulator - Teleporting home after you finish your job is a godsend. No padding emphasizes just how story driven the game is. Keep this up.
• Art - It's good.

Not Cool Stuff

• When you choose to have sex with Robert and choose to cum inside, Ayame has this incredibly stiff look to her because she has her eyes open. It looks awkward and weird. Kind of like in that way if you were to kiss someone on the lips, but you keep your eyes open the whole time. Cumming outside is fine though. That's how it should look like.
• You can move during some cut-scenes. I only know of two; when you first meet Jack and when you meet with Robert to go to the neighbor's house for the first time. In the latter, I was actually fast enough to move to the next screen. Going back to Robert resets the cut-scene. It looks like it only happens during cut-scenes with pauses.
• When choosing decisions, it's weird to be given color coated choices denoting "pure" or "corrupt." It gives the player the information of the outcome, i.e. stat changes, before they even select a choice. I guess it's fine if it's for people who are just in the game for hentai, but in a story driven game, having that sense of mystery of "did I choose the right choice?" and really thinking about what choice the player wants to make really adds to it. Although the color coating is probably a really good idea for New Game+. I'd actually like to hear more about this design choice.
• Some typos - Pretty sure I saw "apron" spelled as "appron" and "house" being cut off as "hou."
• The three "thugs" that come to the bar aren't thugs at all. Only the one on the top left is. The others are "Uhh... Yes, I'm ready to order please."
• When you talk to the shithead who's in cahoots with Melvin BEFORE you change into your apron, the image displayed of Ayame is of Ayame AFTER she changes into her apron.
• Dialogue seems really... simple? Best way I can describe it. Also during sex scenes, don't be afraid to add in details.
• During the last few days of work, I didn't get a message saying I got paid. I think I got paid though. Specifically I think it was the last two days.

Super Minor Nit Picky Stuff

• The red when describing the moral system isn't red. It's like an orange.
• Calling them "Quest" is out of place for a game set in modern time.

Thanks for the detailed feedback, most of that stuff has been fixed, that bug with colors was caused by having a LOT of different window skins, the main one wasn't meant to be the main one, but it's fixed now.

The color coating only on New Game+ sounds like a really good idea, will discuss and probably implement as it does leave that sense of mistery as you mention on the first playthrough.

 

[kosteo006]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I guess I don't speak for everyone here, but I feel like people are REALLY being hard on this game for no good reason. I think it's great, and I enjoyed it a good bit. I wish the demo was longer...but I mean...who wouldn't? Art was good, story seems good, decent pace. I like it. To hell with some of these complainers!

 

[Mouse]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I guess I don't speak for everyone here, but I feel like people are REALLY being hard on this game for no good reason. I think it's great, and I enjoyed it a good bit. I wish the demo was longer...but I mean...who wouldn't? Art was good, story seems good, decent pace. I like it. To hell with some of these complainers!

Agreed.

 

[hrpgheaven]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I guess I don't speak for everyone here, but I feel like people are REALLY being hard on this game for no good reason. I think it's great, and I enjoyed it a good bit. I wish the demo was longer...but I mean...who wouldn't? Art was good, story seems good, decent pace. I like it. To hell with some of these complainers!

I appreciate it but, I don't think people are being hard, there's like two negative reviews and one of the guys doesn't even speak proper english and feels that women should be used to being molested in their work place.

The Patreon signs are meant to be changed later on for other websites and stuff other people choose, advertisement to other games, etc.

There's already a few around like Aylia's Story if you check in the river area below Melvin's Pub.

 

[Imlerith]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

Let's hope that the majority of the h-content will be in the spirit of what we have seen in the demo. The 2 scenes with the boss are so promising. Most h game creators don't get that making a straightforward game in which the heroine has sex casually is as boring as watching porn.(Ill assume that most people playing games like this one and Aylia's story etc. agree with me)

 

[thswherizat]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

one of the guys doesn't even speak proper english and feels that women should be used to being molested in their work place.

I'm glad I wasn't the only one who read that as extremely confusing. As someone who has worked as a server for years, those kinds of things really aren't all that common in normal establishments.

 

[FinalCloud]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

Yes we will, and the NTR is not heavy to the point where non-NTR fans can't enjoy it.

Hi thanks for your response, this is good to know, I look forward to your future work and the full release!

@ The guy some way up saying people are being hard on the creator

Meh, some people will always find something to complain about, personally I only think you have any right to complain
about anything if you have paid for it.
Although some people can be trying to offer constructive criticism just they have no tact whatsoever.

 

[Dragon]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

Been waiting for this for a while now. Although the demo is a little short, I can tell the full game is going to be worth the wait. Here are some thoughts.

Cool Stuff

• Music - Unique.
• Attention to detail - Sprites to actual images were spot on.
• Not a walking simulator - Teleporting home after you finish your job is a godsend. No padding emphasizes just how story driven the game is. Keep this up.
• Art - It's good.

Not Cool Stuff

• When you choose to have sex with Robert and choose to cum inside, Ayame has this incredibly stiff look to her because she has her eyes open. It looks awkward and weird. Kind of like in that way if you were to kiss someone on the lips, but you keep your eyes open the whole time. Cumming outside is fine though. That's how it should look like.
• You can move during some cut-scenes. I only know of two; when you first meet Jack and when you meet with Robert to go to the neighbor's house for the first time. In the latter, I was actually fast enough to move to the next screen. Going back to Robert resets the cut-scene. It looks like it only happens during cut-scenes with pauses.
• When choosing decisions, it's weird to be given color coated choices denoting "pure" or "corrupt." It gives the player the information of the outcome, i.e. stat changes, before they even select a choice. I guess it's fine if it's for people who are just in the game for hentai, but in a story driven game, having that sense of mystery of "did I choose the right choice?" and really thinking about what choice the player wants to make really adds to it. Although the color coating is probably a really good idea for New Game+. I'd actually like to hear more about this design choice.
• Some typos - Pretty sure I saw "apron" spelled as "appron" and "house" being cut off as "hou."
• The three "thugs" that come to the bar aren't thugs at all. Only the one on the top left is. The others are "Uhh... Yes, I'm ready to order please."
• When you talk to the shithead who's in cahoots with Melvin BEFORE you change into your apron, the image displayed of Ayame is of Ayame AFTER she changes into her apron.
• Dialogue seems really... simple? Best way I can describe it. Also during sex scenes, don't be afraid to add in details.
• During the last few days of work, I didn't get a message saying I got paid. I think I got paid though. Specifically I think it was the last two days.

Super Minor Nit Picky Stuff

• The red when describing the moral system isn't red. It's like an orange.
• Calling them "Quest" is out of place for a game set in modern time.

I agree with most of the things here. Apart from that I would like to add that it would be nice to hear those squishing intercourse sounds (penis entering moist vagina or slurping during blowjobs, yeah, you get the point) during H-Scenes. It really adds value in my opinion, and makes the H-scene feel more complete. It may sound rather nitpicky to others though. Apart from that, good job!

 

[hrpgheaven]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

We have placeholders for those because we don't have the noises and we don't like to steal stuff, we will eventually get our VA to do them.

 

[Hentaisearch]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I guess I don't speak for everyone here, but I feel like people are REALLY being hard on this game for no good reason. I think it's great, and I enjoyed it a good bit. I wish the demo was longer...but I mean...who wouldn't? Art was good, story seems good, decent pace. I like it. To hell with some of these complainers!

It's okay to be a bit hard. If people have legitimate criticisms about the game, let the developers hear it. The game is still in the making so give the developers all your criticisms and ideas, it'll make the final product that much better. Being a "Yes Man" is one of the worst things you can do for a developer.

We have placeholders for those because we don't have the noises and we don't like to steal stuff, we will eventually get our VA to do them.

Just curious if you don't mind me asking, how did you get a VA for this? I'd imagine most people would be too embarrassed for this type of work.

 

[Froleytia]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I really want to punch Melvin in the face right now

 

[Shiri garu]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I played the demo and it was great! The characters were drawn well and seems to be a good story quest we got going here. All the demo showed us was Ayame getting a job and getting groped and I love the slow corruption process and by the looks of the map it looks like quite a few different jobs she can do.

Although the town is empty with no people on it. Maybe add some to the final version along with some interaction with them like some people that will grope you as you pass by or teens playing a prank on her. Maybe take the bus ends up Ayame getting grope as well? Some ideas.

I really love Ayame's character love her outfit. it's not over sexual for casual clothes but at the same time she does look sexy and her ass looks great in i(even more so when she bends over. Love Mini skirts! along with panty flashes. XD

The demo teased me but it show how great this game can be.

 

[Reepyr]

Re: Ayame's Adventure - Public Demo Release

I think this did an excellent job at doing the two main things that demos need to do: give examples of the writing, artwork, and story as well as leaving the player wanting more.

Congratulations on a successful public release!