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Back in Highschool, my American Lit. class had a unit on Native American creation stories, and our assignment was to come up with and write a creation story of our own - for anything we wanted. While cleaning out my flash drives, I found this and decided to post it here so you can post your thoughts and I can read them and stuff. I had intended to write it in the rhythmic, simple style of a classic creation fable, but it ended up being way too detailed for that, more in the style of a fictional short story. Regardless, I got a passing grade.
I couldn't figure out how to correctly indent it like it had initially been, so I put a '>' at the beginning of each paragraph.

Also, it isn't porn, that may or may not be an issue, I'm not sure if this forum is specifically for adult works, but I'll remove it if it is.

>Their technology was unmatched, for there were none to match them. For all the space in the universe, there was but one light: The enormous headlight on the bow of their vessel. It barely penetrated the darkness, exposing the bleak, rocky surface of each and every planetoid that they had come across, a constant reminder of their inevitable fate.
>They would be doomed to drift for eternity, their ship's thrusters bringing the fatigued wanderers to one crushed hope after another. The constant knowledge that their was no home for them only brought them together. Nothing unites people more than a shared loneliness.
>But they only thought they were alone.
>From the depths, they always said. "It lived in the depths of deep space."
The creature wasn't one of them, it wasn't one of anything, it hadn't sought to belong, only prey.
When they told us the story, again and again to remind us of what we could not understand, their description would change. They had seen it shift before them, and even now their minds would not decide on how the creature was shaped, as that was its nature.
>It was an outsider.

>Their wandering civilization was working for hundreds of cycles on changing their ship. It was harder than it should have been, for they had no suits to withstand the pressure of the vacuum outside. It had taken them so much time to recover and understand the methods of their enigmatic ancestor.
>The colony's goal was to create an enormous ball of fire, to light up the galaxy and make the planets livable for the first time since Father's footsteps had graced their surfaces. The planets would gather around the fire ball and circle it for eternity. The leader of the project was a woman named Eve, who was faithless to a fault. She did not believe their home had been made by a wise, mysterious, and benevolent, whom the others called "Father" with reverence. She favored instead a cynical view that they stemmed from people like themselves, forgotten in the pages of time. She never told us why.
>When the project was finished, the creature opened its eyes and drew breath, three gapin holes somehow darker than the void itself opened and swallowed the light. It wondered when it should reveal itself. It had been waiting hungrily for so long, and it knew that the moment of reckoning was at hand. When the light shone and brought the universe around a new focal point, the people would have countless planets to choose from, and more of them would spring to being to feed it forever and ever. It just had to make them forget themselves.
>The creature that lived in the deepest part of space remembered its origin, it had been called by Father himself. Called it from elsewhere...
He hadn't liked its ferocity, its terrifying intelligence, or its animalistic hunger for his people, his children. He'd banished it to the dark void of deep space, where it would sleep and wait for its prey to return to it. It couldn't attack the ship's hull, but it had spent the last many cycles devising a way to get inside, get to the people on board where they would be least defended. Showing patience only demonstrated by a creature with no death to fear, it covered every contingency. It knew that its victory was assured.
>When the sensors on the vessel spotted, for the first time, a life-form in the darkness they eagerly let it in, using the old and unused airlock since Father's last steps planet-side.
>It hid from them, dashing any real hope they had dared to have. It knew they would be food soon enough.
>When the engine revved and expelled a squealing jet of antimatter, power surges and the fire started forming outside the ship's hull. There would be no stopping the ship's program until the fire was finished, or it would rupture violently. The beast set to work, killing the crew and colony of the ship, purposefully avoiding Eve and her husband. It ate and ate the colonists, while the woman took her husband and ran to the ship's out of use escape pod. Power surged into the pod, and it jettisoned from the ship.
>Holding her husband to keep her fear from rising to the surface and tearing her apart. She had no hope that she would ever drift upon a habitable planet in her lifetime, but there were stasis beds in the pod, that had been carefully detailed in Father's notes. She would sleep, and wait for a planet to come to her. Eve watched her abandoned and now fully automated ship finish the ball of fire and drift off into the void, doomed to repeat its task until it could do so no longer. She felt it fitting that there would be more stars in the universe, perhaps one for each of her lost people.
The last thing she saw before hibernation was emblazoned on the lid of her berth. "Father bring you safely, O brave pilgrim."
She closed her eyes and reached out with her mind, praying for her survival, as well as Adam's.

>An eternity passed. Eve, and her husband Adam awoke in a much nicer place than the one they'd left.
Our grandmother looked skyward, into the perfect blue that masked outer space, and whispered "Thank you, Father."
 
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