Actually, what Sandz was suggesting you meant by ‘washed up’ was that you were a little annoyed / upset / something else about the fact that I had to change it so that Justin isn’t related to any of the girls anymore and it’s not real incest anymore thanks to CCBill.
Yeah, I figured it was something more along those lines.
Can I ask, what sort of thing is it that you feel the story is lacking?
If I may chime in here Kel, one thing I saw was that the first the game had a complete lack of taboo (in spite it being incest themed) as well as story. Take the first SWF for example. In the first scene, of the first game, extremely little dialogue is exchanged between brother and sister, and the sister just walks in and gives her brother a tit-fuck and bj. There was no build up or anything that made it feel, for lack of a better term, "naughty". It just happened.
Same thing for the second sister. Little bro gets stuck on a video game, she helps him out and is like, "Hey little bro, lets fuck." And then Mom got grabbed by a bunch of clones from the night before, was left feeling horny, cooked some breakfast and then before you know it she just spread her legs for her son. Why was everything so quick?!
The problem was there was no conflict between the characters or build up in the story at all. Sex just happened between family members so suddenly and nonchalantly that it seemed a little boring.
The second game was a vast improvement over the first. It had more of a story that made me more interested in the characters, and what was going to happen with them. I understand that the purple "rock" was like a powerful aphrodisiac for superheroes, but after Justin and his cousin Paige fucked, and the effects of the aphrodisiac wore off again, she had a nonchalant attitude of "Yeah, whatever. I just fucked and sucked my cousin. No big deal. Oh hey! My mom, your aunt, is stressed out! We should use the purple rock on her to help her relax!"
And they did, and the game was over. It just felt so sudden and incomplete.
Now consensual sex is one thing, but if its too easy, it can get boring to watch. If you watch a lot of it that is. That's the problem with porn, it can desensitize you. I believe a lot of us look at porn, cartoon or real. My favorite kind of porn is rough porn, because that keeps me from getting bored. As you can see a lot of that in my own games. Dominate males (or creatures) are sexually conquering dominate females and not being nice about it. You got to be careful though because if you do it wrong it can get too "rapey" and then your idea gets pulled. Look what happened to Lord Escobar with Hellbound Boobies. That was a shitty deal.
Anyway my characters never make love, they fuck. And when they fuck, they fuck hard and fast. Or they fuck someone or "something" that they normally wouldn't. It's about intensity. Look at my Thuna Thunder-Juggs idea. She is this super hot, massive-titted, viking warrior with a high status of authority among her people who is stuck between a rock and a hard place. And she is going to get it on with a sentient octopus-like creature and a frog-like creature that probably reach up to her knees when she is standing. This is of course if I get my way.
But think about it, a famous and powerful female warrior is going to degrade herself by having sex with these creatures, but at the same time she is going to get the fucking of her life time! And dare I say she ends up enjoying it as she reaches heights of ecstasy from being degraded as such? But once it is done, and she gets back tot he surface, she will go back to her tough bitchy self, only to get sexually degraded again by another creature or creatures. Cumming on the face of a super titted, bitch, of an authority figure is much more exciting than just finding a hot girl who is easy.
Look at Juggs. She is not just a cop, but the top cop of MNF Metropolis. She is always getting the short end of the stick in some way, and ends up getting fucked hard. I'm not a lady gaga fan really, but here is a line from her song poker face. "And baby when it's love, if its not rough it isn't fun". I believe in this. It's more like your characters are making love like civilized human beings instead of being broken down in to sex-crazed animals. But again you gotta keep a balance. Not in any Juggs game does she want to be a sex toy, she takes herself and her job seriously, but things always get turned sideways for her and she ends up being a begrudging, big-titted, cum receptacle who hates to admit that she enjoys it. But when the throes of passion take their toll, she is screaming for more. The guys in your story never really do that to anyone. They are too laid back, polite, and not assertive enough, and the girls are also too easy going and are like, "Hey! Wanna fuck?" And when it happens, it's just too casual.
And when you are writing about incest it needs to feel like it's about incest! It's something that isn't casual or moral, or let alone normal. But if done right (and I mean this in a pure fantasy setting) it can be really hot. That's why some people probably like SHHJ over SWF. I have intensity in my stories, I make a good display of the taboo acts of incestuous feelings!
Watching the pure and righteous try to resist, then become defiled by having every one of their holes reamed by a big cock, and then being covered in cum; that is what is hot. And superheroines are paragons of virtue. They are the sweetest fruit to spoil. That's why the corruption of such dirty sex didn't take right away with Mighty Mom or the Busty Bomber for that matter. They both needed a push. One could argue they kind of got...dare I say it?...raped? But it was done in a way that worked without people feeling bad about it. And then in subsequent chapters Mighty Mom ended up liking it a bit and discovering her inner slut. That made it all that much more fun, whether some people want to admit it or not.
Maybe the calm and carefree attitude is your style. Maybe you like that easy going, super chilled sexual atmosphere in your fantasies. But if you're wondering what some other people don't like about it that's because it can get a little dull.
There. I hope this feedback helps. If you found any of this criticism insulting, please don't. I am trying to help you and not hurt your feelings. If you think I am wrong and disagree with everything I am saying I will respect that Kel, because we are all different and have different tastes. This is the reason I wanted the MNF annual awards. Not to rub it into anyone's face but as a way to gather data to see if I was right about the theory on my characters and stories popularity. Lots of people like Juggs, Mighty Mom, Nancy Boobitch, etc etc. But I wanted to know why so I could understand even better for myself, and use that data to help hone my craft and try to make better stories. And I think it helped. Because it helps give me proof to show that I have some idea of what I am talking about.
