Crawdaddy
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Re: Meet and Fuck Games Community
I'll do it for ya, buddy:
So, for the review:
It's obvious that you've put effort into this, so you deserve kudos for that, even if people don't like the rewritten story arcs.
I'll do it for ya, buddy:
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So, for the review:
I like the Reporter ones a lot better than the Halloween one, because the latter makes things a bit more mundane and with an arguable downer (if funny) ending, though the plot twist is clever. I just prefer the original story.
Now for News Reporter, well I prefer the original incestuous scenario, but that's because I'm a self-declared freak. However, the scenario as you have it is quite good and works well.
The dialogue... Jesus, man, the dialogue. It's so fucking over the top ridiculous that I actually kinda love it. The expletive-laden lines made me chuckle on more than one occasion. I was afraid it would be cringey to begin with (and it probably will be to some), but then you just kept driving it beyond that and into hilarious territory. I approve. The back-and-forth banter flows quite well even.
Just promise me you'll never make Natasha or any other adult female character say "lolz" again.
On a tehnical note, the square layout is sometimes a bit confusing, with the reading order being downwards when you would normally want to go to the right. That's probably something you should keep in mind for future stories.
Now for News Reporter, well I prefer the original incestuous scenario, but that's because I'm a self-declared freak. However, the scenario as you have it is quite good and works well.
The dialogue... Jesus, man, the dialogue. It's so fucking over the top ridiculous that I actually kinda love it. The expletive-laden lines made me chuckle on more than one occasion. I was afraid it would be cringey to begin with (and it probably will be to some), but then you just kept driving it beyond that and into hilarious territory. I approve. The back-and-forth banter flows quite well even.
Just promise me you'll never make Natasha or any other adult female character say "lolz" again.
On a tehnical note, the square layout is sometimes a bit confusing, with the reading order being downwards when you would normally want to go to the right. That's probably something you should keep in mind for future stories.
It's obvious that you've put effort into this, so you deserve kudos for that, even if people don't like the rewritten story arcs.
