Mystic Girl?

[Hentaispider]

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IT'S HERE!

I have to say that I expected something with more... well, description, to start with. After reading that, I have absolutely no idea what the woman looks like, which is kinda important, as she's the protagonist. I don't know what the surroundings are, except that there is a cave and there are some cliffs. It's like seeing a sketch compared to seeing a painting.

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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I have to say that I expected something with more... well, description, to start with. After reading that, I have absolutely no idea what the woman looks like, which is kinda important, as she's the protagonist. I don't know what the surroundings are, except that there is a cave and there are some cliffs. It's like seeing a sketch compared to seeing a painting.

She looks like LineMarvel's art, that's why it's the sig.

When I first started writing it, I said I'd be using his designs.

But I'll put in more description of her in the future, outside her hair and what she's wearing.

 

[Master_Bei_Shun]

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Actually... A bit of seasoning to go with this topic,

I was thinking about this game, yet to be made, that we know all this information about...

And then LM poofed like the big poofer he is.

Leaving us with raised pants and wet drawers, but no game to ease our burden...


Shouldn't it be up to us to finish this unfinished piece of work?

As it is left to us to update Jungle Girl and maybe later on DG

And if so what would Mystic Girl BE like?



What I came up with was a Hentai varient of the Madness series from Newgrounds,

No guns, your "sentinel" attacks in a small arc in four different elements

Baddies therefore all have one innate "element" there vulnerable to

Instead of having a health bar only there could be the DG's Orgasim and Energy meter with a fourth invisible one for lust used as a multiplier for the orgasim bar.

A "Mystic Beam" to clear the baddies on screen, seemingly Unlimited in number but raises lust bar and requires a recharge period.

Ending of insemination loops increase the Lust bar

Bosses have a never ending insemination loop but there appendage is attackable and of random element

Multiple Game Over's:
Loss of health ends game with a KO'ed Game Over screen loop, where she wakes up to find them reaming her unconscious body while she slept...
Loss of energy causes her to stop being able to resist and she gives in...

Winning is still up in the air currently...



But thats just a bit of my own wishful thinking, All I know is I'd already be working on it if I could...

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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Alright, I'm looking to the members of ULMF for a little assistance!!!

I'm currently writing chapter two of Mystic Girl, in which I flesh out the world a bit more. What I need are monsters.

I don't want super vicious looking things, nor do I want monster-girls. What I'm looking for are more creatures along the lines of what was seen in Demon Girl/Angel Girl and LineMarvel's Mystic Girl monster, the "Jumper" (which featured in chapter one, you can see it below).

What I really, really want would be little sketches or color drawings of various creatures. It can be basic or it can be detailed, from MSPaint to Photoshop, but whatever you decide on, follow THREE RULES:

1. It must be capable of being used in sex scenes/pleasure acts.
2. It must be something that could be a relatively weak-to-medium strength monster: no supremely overpowered no-chance-whatsoever instant Game Over monsters (ala the Red Tentacle Beast).
3. It must make logical sense within the rules of the world (for instance, if it flies, you must say why, if it crawls say so, if it has special abilities you must explain them - I don't want a bunch of Pokemon with comic book powers).

This world will have towns/cities, and we will be visiting other zones of varying temperature and weather and locale, so whatever you decide will fit into an area, post it and I will work it in so long as it makes sense (don't worry, I'm relatively forgiving here).

 

[Kusanagi]

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I vote for the Shroom Penis, or w/e it is Lucas drew.

 

[DarkFire1004]

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Oni drew it. Lucas immortalized it.

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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Oni drew it. Lucas immortalized it.

Oh, you meant the thingy from Oni's DG Doujinshi?

That could be worked into the forest. Any other creatures folks?

 

[Gatorbait]

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Oh dear god, that thing is back...

I'll try to draw a couple basic things out this weekend.

 

[SirOni]

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I vote for the Shroom Penis, or w/e it is Lucas drew.

Ahem, it's called a Penishroom. Also, there's a tentacle monster I've been planning on using in the doujin eventually (lol eventually) called the Pod of Lust. Basically it has a vase/jug-like body thats about a foot/foot and a half in length and there's a multitude of small tentacles inside it. What it does is it hides (probably buries itself underground) and when some unsuspecting victim come past it shoots a bunch of tentacles upwards and grabs onto the persons legs. Using this it pulls itself out of the ground and pulls its victim on top of it or failing that low enough so the other tentacles can grab onto the persons body. It then begins to go to town on them.

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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Ahem, it's called a Penishroom. Also, there's a tentacle monster I've been planning on using in the doujin eventually (lol eventually) called the Pod of Lust. Basically it has a vase/jug-like body thats about a foot/foot and a half in length and there's a multitude of small tentacles inside it. What it does is it hides (probably buries itself underground) and when some unsuspecting victim come past it shoots a bunch of tentacles upwards and grabs onto the persons legs. Using this it pulls itself out of the ground and pulls its victim on top of it or failing that low enough so the other tentacles can grab onto the persons body. It then begins to go to town on them.

Isn't that what the giant ball of yellow tentacles does though?

As for Penishroom, I may do a slight redesign - I don't want to blatantly rip off of Demon Girl's world, and also monsters in Mystic Girl's work (typically) aren't capable of human speech.

Which brings me to another question: If you'll notice, while Mystic Girl has indeed had thoughts so far, she hasn't actually spoken besides moans, groans, and "Ahh!" and "hmm...". This is because I wanted to see how I could do with a chapter without dialogue from her. None of the characters we've met so far in LineMarvel's works, from JG to DG have shown a lot through speech (save at the end of DG).

Mystic Girl is fairly new to most of her world, but she is well learned on items and such due to the aforementioned traders and travelers. As for whether she speaks the same language or not, or whether she'll have to find alternate forms of communication, I've yet to decide. What do you guys think?

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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UPDATE ON STUFFZ:

If anyone has seen the 'Little Sister Becky' debatecle (debate/debacle) over at Blank Page, they already know this: Linae (Mystic Girl) is 16 in her own years, and thus old/young enough to have a coming of age travel story. HOWEVER, to prevent people from giving me a hard time over that, I've rewritten the year system!

A year in Mystic Girl's world will be 480 days, which will make her be 21 in our years and thus legal, but 16 in her world, keeping her at the right age for the coming of age deal.

Also, I still has no new monsters x.x anyone have some doodles at least? Something I can extrapolate from?

 

[SirOni]

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Spoiler

big image is big, mostly because I couldn't be arsed to crop it. The tentacle pod is the one I'm planning on using in the doujin eventually, feel free to use it.

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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=( Anyone have anything else? I'm really reluctant to just reuse enemies from Demon Girl, or to just take all of the things that Oni planned to use. I've had a lot of people who said they'd have scribbles of little beasties in by this past Monday, but so far all seven of them haven't contacted me.

I'm at a roadblock on the story because I'd like to move us into one of the cities/towns to flesh out the world more, but still barely having any viable creatures. So I don't really have a world yet.

If I could get at least two or three more beasties in the vein of the Jumper and Vibrabeetle (ie: something you could see living in the same world as them, but as diverse as animals we have in real life).

 

[Termite]

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I'm just having trouble thinking of something, but I think I figured something out. I'll send you a little PM to give you a description, and I'll try to work on some pictures tonight.

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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Well, me posting certainly got attention.

It also got me five kinds of caterpillar and a jellyfish idea.

So I'll see what I can do for now until I get more XP

For simplicities sake so we don't get too many repeats, here's what's been done:

Jumper (no assigned animal)
Vibrabeetle (Shelled Beetle)
Pillamite (Caterpillar creature, an amalgamation of ideas, named in part after Termite due to his form being the main drawn from)
Waterlight (Jellyfish creature, inspiration found by 'Shrike7' and directed to me by plmnko)

 

[Termite]

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Dangit, I thought there would be copies! You still want me to try and draw something? All I've got are crappy MS Paint skills that I have no idea how well I'll be able to put into "print".

 

[UrbanKirasagi]

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Dangit, I thought there would be copies! You still want me to try and draw something? All I've got are crappy MS Paint skills that I have no idea how well I'll be able to put into "print".

Your description was good enough that I think I can visualize it, but if you want to try and throw together a few other creature doodles, feel free. It doesn't have to be Monet =P

 

[Nuula]

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UPDATE ON STUFFZ:

A year in Mystic Girl's world will be 480 days, which will make her be 21 in our years and thus legal, but 16 in her world, keeping her at the right age for the coming of age deal.

16 Is legal in the UK... so its all fine

 

[Hentaispider]

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16 Is legal in the UK... so its all fine

Not for porn it isn't - the age limit of 18 for both viewing and participating in porn seems to be pretty universal.

 

[ToxicShock]

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Everyone really needs to stop fucking up the difference between legal adult and age of consent.