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Re: C.Y.O.A.S. Fanta's first
How does a person not notice something getting them off?
4, Cullnis figures out there is a tentaclething on her crotch and just goes along with it.
3a, more description of what's happening is good.
3b, I haven't noticed anything not standard-fantasy-stuff yet but apparently this is your first and there's only two pages worth of CYOAing. I would like for it to focus on either porn or adventure - right now it seems like it's adventure that REALLY wants to be porn, so neither aspect is really fulfilling.
How does a person not notice something getting them off?
4, Cullnis figures out there is a tentaclething on her crotch and just goes along with it.
3a, more description of what's happening is good.
3b, I haven't noticed anything not standard-fantasy-stuff yet but apparently this is your first and there's only two pages worth of CYOAing. I would like for it to focus on either porn or adventure - right now it seems like it's adventure that REALLY wants to be porn, so neither aspect is really fulfilling.