I mean that would be true if this was the only untranslated game left but there's still like half a dozen of them so I don't see why they couldn't just work on those ones instead.
That near precision slit reminds me of Robocop 2 Kane. Really did fuck her brains out eh
Love to see that in a JSK game, lol.
The fact that you won't share these translations pisses me off like you won't believe but that's your choice in the end an I can't change that.
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Oh uh I didn't mean to come off as rude or anything if I did I apologize. I'm not an english major either merely an native english speaker. For example I still don't know what the fuck semicolons are used for. You can just take my opinion as one from an average native speaker.The fact that you won't share these translations pisses me off like you won't believe but that's your choice in the end an I can't change that.
Also since you want to work on your lewds it's critique time.
For Majokko Sharry "more deeper" is an incorrect modifier use it's like saying something is big huge which makes shit just sounds weird. You'll need to drop one of them for the sentence to be correct although I'd suggest dropping "more" since you used "deeper" earlier and using it again emphasizes it giving it more of an impact.
The only thing I see that could be wrong with Le dernier is that the second comma might be unneeded. I've never been that good with commas so I might be mistaken about that however.
As for Home Guard 2- Lewd warning while there is nothing grammatically wrong with it I think the sentence could flow better. For example "The pleasure could be seen on her face as my cock pounded the deepest part of her pussy." However if this game is more of an oldtime or higher society setting then I'd think your version would fit better since it's more proper sounding then casual.
The biggest pitfall for writing lewds and even writing in general is incorrect grammar. It's even worse then typos (which are still pretty bad) because of how the brain works when reading since while it's possible to miss typos when reading something if you hit a grammar error it's almost guaranteed to break the flow of the words and subsequently the reader's immersion because they have to stop reading to mentally correct the sentence. While that might only take a single second or two to fix in the reader's head that's still a second or two that the reader is interrupted from their reading and no one likes to be interrupted when they're enjoying something. So the biggest advice I could give you is to not make mistakes in the language you're writing in.
Majokko Sharry(Shirley in my translation, could have gone with Charlie due to her alias as witch being Charlotte); 「もっと、もっと 私の中に奥まで突いて……！」Translates to "More, push it more deeper inside me…!" Which I changed to what I presented on my earlier post, I am sorry if that doesn't satisfy your taste in smut writing, but this is exactly what she says; "Motto, motto watashi no nakani okumade tsuite……!", I simply changed the first 'more' to 'deeper', because that's the kind of line I often see in doujins when it comes to initial insertion dialogue when the female is horny as fuck and erotically begging for the guy to go balls deep.
As for Le Dernier, that is the literal translation of the given line, the sentence had \.\. command on "between, while", which means 2 second pause in RPGmaker ACE terms before more text appears, I replaced that with a comma to make it easier to skip through already seen scenes, it is more of convenience on my end to be able to run through scenes without waiting for every pause that has been put in the flow of dialogue while play testing the scene in game, makes it tedious to go through dialogue that has around 10 seconds of wait command in between first letter and last period in every non dialogue text box, especially when the game in question is extremely text heavy when it comes to ero scenes, and this scene has 4 + 4 variations alone, risky day and safe day dialogue, so yeah, time to cut some corners in terms of aesthetics.
Home guard 2 is more recent practice of mine, I ended up using "The sense of pleasure spread around her face as my cock pounded into deepest part of her pussy." as final version of the given sentence instead of the one I posted above, the way I write english is what it is, as long as you can understand me, I am satisfied with it.
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As for the grammatical errors, I can't help with those whenever those might pop up, I am not a english major / native, you're practically making a fun out of someone whom spend years to learn to speak and write it on level so that the person can at least cross the language barrier, I know my english is not perfect, I do my best regardless that obvious fault, how about you learn finnish (South Ostrobothnia or Karelian accent / dialect) within few years and translate a game from another foreign language you have to pick up from zero as well without any formal education for either, its a lot harder than I make it seem, if you can do that, then I will gracefully accept any and all complaints about my lack of proper english grammar, which is also why I don't work well with others when it comes to translation, so I can translate instead of wasting time to explain in detail why I chose to write it the way it is, or argue over creative differences, with the latter being the biggest reason why translation circles fall apart over time.
Long rant short, I am doing my best, okay?
With that, criticism received and taken into account.
Bruh same
thatguyinthecorner said:
You need to uninstall 32-bit Java and install 64-bit Java. Otherwise the program can only use four gigabytes of system memory.
i install java64 and still appears...
You also need to uninstall 32-bit Java. They can't be installed at the same time. Both versions share the same global path variables. Only 32-bit Java will be seen even if you have both installed.
